I like the short stories, by themselves at least. Reading only one at a time does not bother me. It's like reading Flash Fiction. Nothing more than simple flashes of detailed stories, thats fine, but I do not like that they are meant to be one story I guess.
The stories are nice, and they do connect. For example, the story regarding his sons fighting, and the video of he and his brother in the pool. Also, the opening about the garage, and the story about he and his brothers in their garage, and their dad connect well. The problem is they jump from different times with no real sense of reason. It makes it harder to follow, it interrupts the flow of the stories. I assume there is a real for this jumping around, but I have yet to figure it out.
I do however like the way he divides the essays up into selections based on a major theme, and that the theme is the "chapter" title. I didn't pay a lot of attention to those at first, but I should have because they help you to see the connections between each essay.
Sarah,
ReplyDeleteThese posts are supposed to be 300 words. Give it another shot, please.
Also, What do you mean by "flows?"
ReplyDeleteI think your criticisms are valid, but be clearer about what you mean.
It's good to know that this is a collection of linked essays. The story isn't going to move forward in quite the same way as a memoir.
Better Sarah. Talk more about how the scenes "connect." That's where you'll get into really valuable analysis.
ReplyDeleteGrade: 7.5/10
P.S. Where you have "he and his brother" it should read "him and his brother." Him in the pool not he in the pool. Also, that piece isn't a sentence.